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Global warming is a big concern these days . Though there has been much noise made on this issue , carbon emission is not being curtailed . Are we contributor to this issue ? What solutions do you propose to counter this issue ? Discuss .

#concern #noise #carbon #emission #contributor #counter
Industrialization is on
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 brink of success and technologies have become way more essential for mankind,
therefore
this
 development and environment do not go hand-in-hand, even after several proclaims the situation is not changed.
This
 essay intends to
analyze
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analyse
 all the nooks and their concerns.
Firstly
, the movement in 1850 known as industrial revolution has made a long term impact on
number
Suggestion
the number
a number
 of
businesses
Accept comma addition
businesses, however
however
, the effect is still on a top gear.
Plethora
Suggestion
A plethora
The plethora
 of new industries
are
Suggestion
is
 under construction as well where, it becomes necessary to develop industries for citizens to counterpart unemployment and for
stable economy
Suggestion
a stable economy
.
This
 generation is now under the practice of life convenience that it is not possible to
stop
Accept comma addition
stop, however
however
, the demand of
product
Suggestion
the product
make
Suggestion
makes
this
 necessary.
Further more
in addition
Furthermore
, the world is developing on the edge of a sword, extravagant use of fossil fuel is enough to make the farrago of nectar and poison in the air, emissions of toxic and carbon through industries and vehicles are increasing on
alarming rate
Suggestion
an alarming rate
. Ominous, of the world temperature and there is no stoppage for that, fluctuating atmosphere working as an evidence of crime.
In contrast
, there must be a
ubiquity
Suggestion
ubiquitous
 solution to repeal
this
 scenario, strict laws must be introduced and
government
Suggestion
the government
 must take the onus of
this
 combat. Maximum usage of public transportation rather than private vehicle would be appreciable, alternative
of
Suggestion
to
 fossil fuel to limit the pollution would be benevolent exercise. To recapitulate, undoubtedly the world would be soon victim of heavy backlashes,
therefore
 it is of paramount importance to stop the situation going astray, in my
opinion I
Accept comma addition
opinion, I
 think both sections are
equal
Suggestion
equally
 valuable for life but
masses
Suggestion
the masses
 must minimise carbon emission as much as possible.
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