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17. Some people think that a persons improve their intellectual skills more when doing a group activity. To what extend do you agree.

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As we all know, it is a long journey for a person to become a scholar. Some people believe that
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, I agree with them under certain conditions. The essay will discuss my agreement with
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work will contribute to the
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 of cognitive intelligence and wisdom in the certain conditions. If a 
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 members who are willing to grow together, it will enhance their individual
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growth
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. There is a Chinese saying, " In a group of people with more than three individuals, there is always a teacher among them." During
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 or ideas during
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, which may not be learned from books or limited personal experience.  On the contrast, in certain situation,
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a tough task
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, in
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 will create conflict and it is a challenging task for each member to reach the same agreement.
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 will distort participants' thought rather than helping them to obtain
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. In
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.  In conclusion,
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 of
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 member's cognitive skills. Whether
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an individual's intelligence
ill depend on many aspects of
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 members,
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 as personal values, religion and attitude as well. I personally agree that the majority of
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