Some people say that health care and education should be the responsibility of the government but others think that it is the responsibility of the individuals themselves.

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In today's world, healthcare and
education
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are two most important parts of people's
life
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.
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, without proper
education
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and sufficient
health
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care system, a country can’t develop.
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, the
government
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has the
responsible
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responsibility
to create a healthy
nation
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. Personally, I believe that the
government
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should provide basic needs to create a healthy
life
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and an educated
nation
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independently. Everyone
prefer
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prefers
to have a fascinating
life
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, but we cannot do whatever we want.
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, we have sacrificed some,
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as drugs, tobacco, alcohol, and junk foods etc.
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For
a healthy
life
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. In the present days, people are busy with their day to day work.
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majority of them are not having
balanced diets
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a balanced diet
balanced diet
and some of them take fast food or junk food. They do not concern
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and
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it will cause many diseases in future.
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, obesity,
diabetes etc
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diabetes, etc.
diabetes etc.
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, from the young
age everyone
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age, everyone
should concern about their
health
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. Especially people not only should think about the physical
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health but
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health, but
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consider the mental
health
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.
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why the
government
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should provide better
health
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care and
education
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for all citizens. The
government
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is created by the taxes from valuable workforces of their country.
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, the
government
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has the responsibility to offer them free
health
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care facilities, heath
education
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programme:
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as healthy diet, clinics or hospitals for free medicine, etc.
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, the
government
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can use social media to distribute
health
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and
education
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programme. Because nowadays, the majority of people are connected in social media.
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facebook
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Facebook
, twitter etc.
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, the
government
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should implement
such
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a law in order to increase a balanced lifestyle.
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, due to the overpopulation of China, they have
limited only
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limited, only
one child for one family. In conclusion, when I consider all given points it is clear that only the
government
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cannot make a healthy
nation
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.
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, individuals should have concerns to prevent future
health
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issues.
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, the
government
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should enforce
such
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a law in order to increase our standard of lifestyle and
also
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provide basic needs to the people who are expected from the
government
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. In fact, in my opinion, the
government
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and individuals are both responsible for building a healthy
nation
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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