The graph below shows how elderly people in the United States spent their free time between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant. Write at least 150 words
The figure illustrates the
proportion
of activities done by elderly people in their leisure time in U. S. from 1980s
to Change the article
the 1980s
2010s
.
Correct article usage
the 2010s
Overall
, among the five activities, the percentage of surfing the Internet and hiking increased during
30 years, Change preposition
over
while
three
other activities fluctuated slightly.
It is interesting to note that the percentage of elderly people Correct article usage
the three
spent
time Correct pronoun usage
who spent
by
hiking raised sharply over the Change preposition
apply
periods
from around only 20% in Fix the agreement mistake
period
1980s
up to 80% in Change the article
the 1980s
2010s
. It was similar to the number of surfing the Internet which had a soft increase over 20 years (around 5% to 15%), Correct article usage
the 2010s
then
it jumped to 50% in the next
10 years.
Another thing to see is the proportion
of reading and visiting theatre fluctuated every one
decade. It can be seen by the year of 1980s,Correct pronoun usage
apply
Correct article usage
the
reading's
percentage was 30%, raised up to 40% in Unnecessary verb
reading
1990s
, fell again to 20% in Correct article usage
the 1990s
2000s
, and at Correct article usage
the 2000s
last
climbed up to over 60% in 2010s
. The same Correct article usage
the 2010s
fluctuative
Correct your spelling
fluctuating
proportion
occured
in theatre Correct your spelling
occurred
visit
.
The Fix the agreement mistake
visits
last
thing to figure out is that the proportion
of watching went up respectively from 1980s
to Change the article
the 1980s
2000s
(60% - 70%); Correct article usage
the 2000s
however
, it dropped slowly to nearly 60% in 2010s
.
(193 words)Correct article usage
the 2010s
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Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
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