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Today parents pay a lot of attention to their 
children
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child's
children's
success and there are a variety of
couses
education imparted in a series of lessons or meetings
courses
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doing that. But I think, it brings more negative things than positive in child's life.
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, we
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in the world of high demands. People always seek for a good life qualities which is obviously contains a stable job with big salaries that become
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a synonym
synonyms
for the word success. What is pretty normal for people to be more thorough in
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matter and that kind of situation provokes a
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the act of competing as for profit or a prize
rivalry
between people in
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area.
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why in family atmosphere parents pay attention for children's future achievement from very small ages. They
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put
to
to a degree exceeding normal or proper limits
too
much pressure to it.
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, thing like education, sport or
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its
, which I think is not very beneficial. Generally speaking, that the pressure which is laying on children, may
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give rise to; cause to happen or occur, not always intentionally
cause
causes
caused
a lot of stress. Parents put high expectations on
child's life
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a child's life
the child's life
.
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why they have too much  effort
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at
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work and afraid of being failed at something.
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brings great negative consequences on the psyche of the child and complicates its
further
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development or may even affect his
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
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. In
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think it will be more crucial if parents treat it more freely and give for children more
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room for self-development and do not overpress In conclusion, as the analysed reasons above, I strongly believe that parents  overpressure toward children success lead to many negative effects that can affect kid's health.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • interpersonal skills
  • cooperative skills
  • face-to-face interaction
  • digital communication
  • non-verbal cues
  • active listening
  • education system
  • technical knowledge
  • soft skills
  • remote work
  • work environment
  • comprehensive training programs
  • workshops
  • teamwork
  • role-playing scenarios
  • open communication
  • collaborative efforts
  • educational institutions
  • curriculums
  • hybrid work models
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