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In today’s job market, it is far more important to have practical skills than theoretical knowledge. In the future, job applicants may not need any formal qualifications. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Today parents pay a lot of attention to their  children's success and there
are
Suggestion
is
 a variety of causes doing that. But I think, it brings more negative things than positive in young's life.
Initially
, we live in the world of high demands. People always seek for a good life qualities which is obviously contains a stable job with big salaries that become a synonym for the word success. What is pretty normal for people to be more thorough in
this
 matter and that kind of situation provokes a rivalry between people in
this
 area.
That is
 why in family atmosphere parents pay attention for children's future achievement from very small ages. They often put
to
to a degree exceeding normal or proper limits
too
 much pressure to it.
For instance
, thing like education, sport or other, which I think is not very beneficial. Generally speaking, that the pressure which is laying on children, may cause a lot of stress. Parents put high expectations on a child's life.
That is
 why they have too much  effort at work and afraid of being failed at something.
This
 brings great negative consequences on the psyche of the child and complicates its
further
 development or may even affect his behaviour. In
this
 situation, I think it will be more crucial if parents treat it more freely and give
for
Suggestion
to
 children more space, more room for self-development and do not overpress. In conclusion, as the analysed reasons above, I strongly believe that parents  overpressure toward children
succsless
an event that accomplishes its intended purpose
success
 lead to many negative effects that can affect kid's health.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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