In many countries, children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. What are your opinions on this issue?
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start with, if students be taught about their past events and heroes in their locality, it develops their patriotism and they would treasure their society in adulthood. Suggestion
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a result, they not only would make a better contribution to their society in the Suggestion
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future, but
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background
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the background history
history
of their hometown with foreigners and be proud of their nationality.
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is becoming a global village as the border between local and foreign histories are blurring. Use synonyms
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, thanks to new transportation and technology students can go to other countries or visit them virtually and communicate with people who belong to different nationalities Linking Words
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, nowadays it is prevailing that students immigrate to other countries when become an adult for different purposes like studying in Linking Words
higher level
of education or earn a living by finding a rewarding or Suggestion
higher levels
a higher level
money-making
job. the act of making money (and accumulating wealth)
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Therefore having
thorough insights into the new culture could be quite helpful for getting compatible with the novelty of new culture. Accept comma addition
Therefore, having
Secondly
, understanding past global events in other communities helps students to understand the present problems in their locality and it may give the best solution to them without any trial and errors. Linking Words
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instance, these days our country is in crisis of war and if there is understanding about reasons of 2 past Suggestion
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world
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into a war which engender a catastrophe.
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although
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and both of them alongside can bring about a well-rounded perspective of life and preventing any future calamities.Accept comma addition
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