In many countries, children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. What are your opinions on this issue?

many

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Many

people believe that it is more useful to teach domestic

history

than global

history

in schools. I partly disagree with

this

view and I believe that

world

history

is as important as local

history

.

there

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There

are various advantages

on

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of

to

learning a part of

history

which

is related

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relates

to your own country.

to

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To

start with, if students be taught about their past events and heroes in their locality, it develops their patriotism and they would treasure their society in adulthood.

as

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As

a result, they not only would make a better contribution to their society in the

future but

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future, but

also

could share their knowledge about

background

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the background history

history

of their hometown with foreigners and be proud of their nationality.

On the other hand

,

this

fact

can not

can not

cannot

be denied that how necessary international

history

is.

because

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Because

firstly

, these days

world

is becoming a global village as the border between local and foreign histories are blurring.

Furthermore

, thanks to new transportation and technology students can go to other countries or visit them virtually and communicate with people who belong to different nationalities

in

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from

all over the

world

.

In addition

, nowadays it is prevailing that students immigrate to other countries when become an adult for different purposes like studying in

higher level

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higher levels

a higher level

of education or earn a living by finding a rewarding or

money-making

the act of making money (and accumulating wealth)

moneymaking

job.

Therefore having

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Therefore, having

thorough insights into the new culture could be quite helpful for getting compatible with the novelty of new culture.

Secondly

, understanding past global events in other communities helps students to understand the present problems in their locality and it may give the best solution to them without any trial and errors.

for

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For

instance, these days our country is in crisis of war and if there is understanding about reasons of 2 past

world

war we would avoid getting

trap

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trapped

into a war which engender a catastrophe. All in all,

although

there is no doubt about the importance of learning what our ancestors did in the past by students, international

history

is

vital equally

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vital, equally

and both of them alongside can bring about a well-rounded perspective of life and preventing any future calamities.