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You recently organized a party for your company at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter • describe the party and how it went • explain why you were pleased with the hotel’s service • suggest some improvements that the hotel could make

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Dear sir, I am writing to appreciate your service given at party organized
last
sunday
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 by me for my
collegues
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colleagues
 and company.
Actually
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,Actually
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 it was
annual
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the annual
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 day of our company which is celebrated with great joy every year.The event went good as all office members enjoyed
each
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and everything including food,small events,rides for kids and so on. All party people praised services of
hotel
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the hotel
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 as
guard
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a guard
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 of honour at
enterence
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entrance
 was pleasing .
Moreover
 ,the number and quality of food
was
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were
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 very high as compare to
previous
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the previous
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 year . Event management was fine in terms of time ,fun and people of all age
group
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 enjoyed a lot every event.
Only
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 one thing I would like to tell you which I don’t like was
uncleanliness
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in
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of
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toilets
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the toilets
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 .
Also
,
problem
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the problem
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 of bad odour and slippery floor
were
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was
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 there that lead to
small
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a small
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 accident because one of lady employee was slipped .so I want to suggest that at least 2 sweepers would be assigned
there to
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thereto
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 clean after each use of that area.
Rest
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The rest
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 was fine and I would like to thank you for
this
. Regards Madhvi,

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