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Nowadays many families have both parents working, some working families believe other family members like grandparents can take care of their children while others think childcare centers provide the best care . discuss both views and give your own opinions?

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modern life people
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modern life, people
 have different views about upbringing children in different ways. Some people believe that
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 are the most proper way for them while
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 think that other family members can be responsible for all about children. But in some ways there is an essential difference between them
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 most nuclear
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families, both
 parents work and they have no choice except
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 or nannies and other extended families have some extra options as the grandparents of children live together with them. On the one
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 are some advantages of
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child care
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 being in a
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 gives children more freedom and teaches how to be sociable. Children can evaluate their abilities and they learn how to self-control without parents’ support. That’s why I always approve
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child care
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hand, there
 are some disadvantages of those
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 and of course all children have no equal abilities and family background, so some children may feel disability or they may have bad
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 toys, bags or so on. These could be bad sides of
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child care
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. But when we talk about other family members care we should not forget to
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 sphere a child could be isolated and have some difficulties to meet people in the future life, as well as
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 kind of child can’t learn as much as possible as one who in
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child care
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. As a conclusion I can say that both ways are important as I mentioned
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above, but
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 are more important than family members care.

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