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In many countries today there are many highly qualified graduates without employment. What factors may have caused this situation and what, in your opinion, can/should be done about it? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Introduction
The ratio of qualified individuals produced by academic institutions in lots of countries is higher than available opportunities existing in
such
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 countries.
Body paragraph 1
The issue of unemployment is gradually becoming a global phenomenon that has resulted in
increase
Suggestion
an increase
 in criminal activities. As the popular saying goes " an
idile
not in action or at work
idle
ideal
idol
 hand is the devil's workshop".
This
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 problem did not exist
couple
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a couple
 of years back.
Body paragraph 2
This
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 essay will discuss the reason for
this
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 problem and provide some suggestions on how it can and should be addressed.
Body paragraph 3
One of the fundamental reasons why countries can not cater the needs of its graduates by providing job
opportunies
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunities
 is because of the absence of birth control regulations. A
nation
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 that has a law or legislation in place for families not to produce more than
certain number
Suggestion
a certain number
 of children are more likely able to absorb its graduates and utilize them efficiently to increase the
nation
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's productivity.
Body paragraph 4
Secondly
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, nations with visionary leaders who are constantly striving to boost their economy and increase productivity will find a way to engage its available human resources towards taking the
nation
Use synonyms
's economy to one of the top
in
Suggestion
of
 the globe.
However
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, most leaders these days are concerned about their personal interest and power.
Body paragraph 5
One proposal for immediate solution is for the government to provide more opportunities for its scholars to put their wealth of knowledge to use. Another suggested solution which is more long term is for government to put regulations on birth in place. As
such
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, the population can be controlled, planned and catered for.
Body paragraph 6
An example can be seen in one of the Asian countries where
birth rate
Suggestion
the birth rate
 is regulated, the economy of the country is one of the strongest in the world because its human capital is effectively and efficiently engaged.
Conclusion
In conclusion, unemployment problem can be turned around for good to the benefit of the
nation
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's development and advancement if properly addressed.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • highly qualified graduates
  • employment market
  • job vacancies
  • mismatch of skills
  • economic downturn
  • globalization
  • outsourcing
  • technological advancements
  • market demand
  • skills gap
  • employment opportunities
  • recession
  • job growth
  • graduate unemployment
  • career prospects
  • qualifications
  • relevant experience
  • job market trends
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