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Nowadays children watch a lot of tv and playing video games. However some people think that these activities are not good for child's mental health. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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The rate at which kids watch television and play computer video games is alarming.
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 watching
tv
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 and playing video games are
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educational method
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educational methods
an educational method
 among children. But I believe that too much of these will lead to mental health issues.
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 with, the major problem kids will encounter while watching too much
tv
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 is aggressive
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behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 because children learn by what they see. Their
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behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 changes when they view programs above their age limit without parental guidance. They tend to develop imagination as they imagine the characters from the scenes, which leads to more aggressive
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behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
.
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, playing computer games all the time can lead to unhealthy eating habits which can reduce their growth and development thereby leading to mental health issues. They are easily distracted by focusing more on the games and paying less attention to meal time or eat little portion of food at
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intervals
the interval
. Children that display
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 act are mostly teenagers.
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,
on the other hand
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. Watching
tv
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 and playing video games has a positive effect on kids because it helps them to build their cognitive
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behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 of reasoning and
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 improves their social skills. Kids of these
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categories
relates
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relate
 easily without fear of being harassed
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 their social development increases. In conclusion, it can be
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emphasized
emphatically
 that children that spend much of their time watching
tv
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 and playing computer games tends to behave
aggressively which
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aggressively, which
 leads to mental health problems and as well can improve their social skills and cognitive function. .
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