Nowadays children watch a lot of tv and playing video games. However some people think that these activities are not good for child's mental health. To what extent do you agree or disagree

The rate at which kids watch television and play computer video games is alarming.
Although
watching
tv
and playing video games are
also
educational method
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educational methods
an educational method
among children. But I believe that too much of these will lead to mental health issues.
To begin
with, the major problem kids will encounter while watching too much
tv
is aggressive
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
because children learn by what they see. Their
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
changes when they view programs above their age limit without parental guidance. They tend to develop imagination as they imagine the characters from the scenes, which leads to more aggressive
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
.
Furthermore
, playing computer games all the time can lead to unhealthy eating habits which can reduce their growth and development thereby leading to mental health issues. They are easily distracted by focusing more on the games and paying less attention to meal time or eat little portion of food at
interval
Suggestion
intervals
the interval
. Children that display
this
act are mostly teenagers.
However
,
on the other hand
. Watching
tv
and playing video games has a positive effect on kids because it helps them to build their cognitive
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
of reasoning and
also
improves their social skills. Kids of these
category
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categories
relates
Suggestion
relate
easily without fear of being harassed
as a result
their social development increases. In conclusion, it can be
emphasis
Suggestion
emphasized
emphatically
that children that spend much of their time watching
tv
and playing computer games tends to behave
aggressively which
Suggestion
aggressively, which
leads to mental health problems and as well can improve their social skills and cognitive function. .
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