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You recently spent the night at an expensive hotel. There was a problem with your room, but the hotel staff was unable to do anything about it. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter • describe the problem. • explain what happened when you asked the hotel staff for help. • say what you would like the manager to do.

#night #hotel #room #staff #manager
Dear Sir or Madam, I thought you should know about the problem that I experienced
last
 week during my stay at your
hotel
.
Television
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The television
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 in my suite was not working. I asked for help
to
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from
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 the
hotel
 staff, but they were not able to turn it on. I hope we can agree on a way to solve the problem. The problem was about
television
. When I tried to turn the
television
 on at night, it was not working. I like to watch a T.V. series, which comes at night every Sunday. Since I stayed at the
hotel
on
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last
 Sunday, I missed the whole episode. When I tried to seek help from the staff members, they could not do anything. They said that the electrician has a day off, and they do not have any idea how to repair the
television
.
Although
 they tried to unplug and plug wires, they were not successful in turning the
television
 on. In my opinion, you should hire two electricians. When one electrician has a day off, another one can address
such
 issues.
As a result
, guests would not face
difficulties
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the difficulties
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 that I faced
last
 Sunday. Since the
hotel
 charges a lot to the guests, we expect the best services from the
hotel
. I hope you are willing to accept my solution. Sincerely, Mansi Patel

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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