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To be labelled a ‘Work of Art’, a painting, sculpture or other art form should display certain qualities that are unique. However, over the past century there has been a decline in the quality of prize-winning artwork and it is now possible for quite ordinary pieces of art to be labelled ‘masterpieces ’ whilst true works of art pass unnoticed. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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To be recognized as the masterpiece of
art
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, the exhibition ought to select some authentic and unique type of drawings or statues,
however
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, since past century, there has been a decrease in the judgement of choosing best artwork which degrades the
value
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 of real arts while those real artworks are covered behind. In my opinion, it
can not
can not
cannot
 be refuted that the real talent of creating arts
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gets
 extinct day by day because of lacking proper appreciation and monetary
value
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. Since people, in the contemporary era, are more into doing
common lucrative
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common, lucrative
 jobs;
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 as, doctor, engineer, professors, corporate leaders etc.
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A youth
Youth
 who has the passion of doing creative arts is unlikely to pursue that
potentials
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potential
 as a career goal. Because they have been trained since childhood to choose the jobs what are appreciated by the other people,
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, in the
art
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 industry, a huge
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number
 of artists are not joining to continue that results a reduction of worth prize winning artworks. Not only that, the
art
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 gallery visitors or clients tend to get isolated
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 with the fast pace journey of life.
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 causes less interested people
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in
 that particular area.
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, the real
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comprehensive, knowledgeable
 artists are not promoted all over the world,
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,
general public
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the general public
 can not verify the real
art
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 work for choosing for
art
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 display,
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, it generates less monetary
value
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 of
art
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 and discourages artists to make more innovative
art
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further
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. To conclude, once the artists get the proper field of doing their work with better facilities,
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 would produce best pieces of arts by appreciating and giving them
value
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 in terms of money and prizes.

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