The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
There are changes in annual spending by a particular school in 1981, 1991 and 2001 in terms of teachers'
salaries
, insurance, furniture and equipment, resources, and other workers' salaries
.
During
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In
in
1981, teachers' Change preposition
apply
salaries
are 40%, which increase in 1991 by 50% and decrease again in 2001 with
45%. Change preposition
by
While
the
insurance is 2% in 1981 which increase in 1991 by 3% and rise dramatically in 2001 with 8%.
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apply
On the other hand
, furniture and equipment is 15% in 1981 which decreases in 1991 by 5% and gradually rise to 23%.
Furthermore
, the resources in books in 1981 was 15%, which became 20% in 1991 and decrease in 2001 to 9%. Lastly
, other workers' salaries
is 28% in 1981 which became 22% in 1991 and decreases in 2001 to 15%.
In conclusion, insurance was increasing through the years while
the rest are
decreasing.Correct subject-verb agreement
is
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