In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family?

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In Britain some elderly often go to live in a
home
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or nursing
home
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with other old people wherein there are nurses to look after them and taking
care
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of them.Sometimes the
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
has to pay for
this
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care
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not the family.In
this
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essay
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'm going to explain who do
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think need to pay for
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care
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.. I must say that the
government
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must pay for the
care
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that the elderly received in
nursing
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a nursing home
nursing homes
home
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.Because, everyone of us pay taxes.
not
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Not
every family afford to pay for it.
some
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Some
are not
rich especially
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rich, especially
in a low class
family which
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family, which
they need to go to work for them to earn money for their everyday expenses
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so they
doesn't have time to taking good
care
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of
there
of them or themselves
their
old mother or father.The
government
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has the right to build a nursing
home
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so that the family of an old man or woman will not be able to pay.
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, if the
government
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did
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they should have rules and regulation and requirements.Because, some people nowadays will abuse the
government
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.But, the
government
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need to be
fair most
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fair, most
important the treatment that the old will be received. I must conclude that, people in the family should be thankful for the
government
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because the
government
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didn't forget senior citizen.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Aging population
  • Elderly care
  • Nursing homes
  • Social welfare
  • Intergenerational responsibility
  • Caregiving
  • Financial burden
  • Quality of life
  • Pension funds
  • Healthcare policy
  • Taxation
  • Subsidies
  • Private insurance
  • Long-term care
  • Sustainability
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