Some people say schools should be responsible to teach young adults to look after their health, others think this is not responsibility of schools. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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the necessity
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an early age
parents and schools.
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, why would we need it at all? Only to learn things that we will never use in our use in our lives.
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of all healthy habits should edu
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educate
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child
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teach
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exercises
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.And who else
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parents or sch
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adulthood, who smoke every
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lifestyle.I would say what it will be qui
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should be encouraged
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conclusion, I
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Nutritional education
  • Childhood obesity
  • Diet-related illnesses
  • Physical fitness
  • Sedentary lifestyles
  • Mental health education
  • Destigmatize
  • Coping mechanisms
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Information overload
  • Holistic approach
  • Well-rounded individuals
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