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You are looking for a part-time job. Write a letter to an employment agency. In your letter: introduce yourself explain what sort of job you would like say what experience and skills you have

Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Laura Green. I am pursuing my master in
computer
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the computer
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system
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systems
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 from
university
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the university
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 of Toronto. I would like to explore
part-time
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a part-time
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opportunity
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opportunities
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 belong side with completing my degree. My interest is in
data
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, so my inclination would be towards it. Analyzing the
data
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 and providing the forecast review or predicting the major problem area. Apart from
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data
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 I would like to work as
field
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a field
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 human resource representative whose main responsibility is to assist new joiners and take organize companies events. Prior
enrolling
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 in a university for
masters
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a masters
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 program, I use to work with Amazon as
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data
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 analyst. Analyzing
data
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 and providing the forecast, strategizing the solution based on the
data
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 collected is one of my
forte
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. Volunteered in organizing several companies events. Kindly let me know if you come across a suitable job opportunity will be looking forward to
hear
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 from you.
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Yours
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Your
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 faithfully, Laura Green

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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