You are looking for a part-time job. Write a letter to an employment agency. In your letter: introduce yourself explain what sort of job you would like say what experience and skills you have

Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Laura Green. I am pursuing my master in

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system

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from

university

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of Toronto. I would like to explore

part-time

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opportunity

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belong side with completing my degree. My interest is in

data

, so my inclination would be towards it. Analyzing the

data

and providing the forecast review or predicting the major problem area. Apart from

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I would like to work as

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human resource representative whose main responsibility is to assist new joiners and take organize companies events. Prior

enrolling

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in a university for

masters

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program, I use to work with Amazon as

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a data

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analyst. Analyzing

data

and providing the forecast, strategizing the solution based on the

data

collected is one of my

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. Volunteered in organizing several companies events. Kindly let me know if you come across a suitable job opportunity will be looking forward to

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from you.

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Your

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faithfully, Laura Green

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You are looking for a part-time job. Write a letter to an employment agency. In your letter: introduce yourself explain what sort of job you would like say what experience and skills you have

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Some students work while studying. This often results in lacking time for education and constantly feeling under pressure. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

4. Tourism is becoming increasingly important as a source of revenue to many countries, but its disadvantages should not be overlooked. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

people sleep less than before in many countries. why do people sleep less? what effects does it have on individuals and society?

some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

As countries develop, more and more people buy and use their own cars. Do the advantages of this trend for individuals outweigh the disadvantages for the environment?