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These days many families move to other countries for work. Some people believe that the children in these families benefit from this move. However, others believe that it makes life more difficult for the children. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, mobility among people is gaining ground radically. Presently,
large number
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a large number
 of families are migrating to overseas for work and accommodation while some people believe that it would lead to complex lifestyle. Here
this
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 essay, accounts for both the sides along with my own opinion. There are plethora points depict
this
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 phenomena.
First
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 and foremost, migrating abroad is supposed to uplift the standard of the education system of the juveniles. To elaborate. Foreign countries provide
qualitative range
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a qualitative range
 of practical and theoretical academic skills which can enhance the health, wealth and living of the offsprings.
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, it will have
affirmative effect
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an affirmative effect
 on the lifestyles of the families too. What is more. Shifting abroad for work and accommodation purposes can sprout a new culture, language, and traditions
in
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with
 them.
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, children become self dependent for earning his own two square
meal
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meals
 for better living.
Besides
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 it, it
uplift
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uplifts
 their dignity and confidence while handling their own chores.
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, mobilising overseas is believed to be a positive trend.
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, opposite wind is
also
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 there. To commence with, the phenomena leads to
stressful lifestyle
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a stressful lifestyle
stressful lifestyles
. To exemplify. Families and juveniles have to handle unnecessary burden of their earning and education which may adversely lay
burden
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burdens
 on their mind.
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 but not least, parents working in abroad has busiest living and had no time for their offsprings.
As a result
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, children lack physical and physiological growth and they remain
unavail
(usually followed by 'to') not having the necessary means or skill or know-how
unable
 from the love and
intimecy
close or warm friendship
intimacy
 of their family members.
For
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To
 my notion, both the sides has its own
significane
the quality of being significant
significance
. Undeniably, it will be uneven to support any of the side entirely. Moving overseas may be beneficial for prosperous
life but
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life, but
 it will adversely affect the
economical
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economic
economics
 and social growth of
native nation
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a native nation
native nations
. To recapitulate, people nowadays are becoming more mobile as compared to
past
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the past
.
Administration
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The administration
 should take proactive steps to provide favourable opportunities within the boundaries to halt the migration for the. Significant growth of the native country.

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