The charts below show local government expenditure in 2010 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show local government expenditure in 2010 and 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
These two pie charts are illustrating information about the spending of
the
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government on nine categories between the
year
2010 till 2015.
Overall
, it can be seen that education contributed to the largest segment of the chart in 2010,
while
others considered
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to be
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the lowest segment. In comparison with the final
year
, education remained the most significant sector,
while
transport, culture and leisure and others were the least popular expenditures.
At
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the beginning, welfare experienced a number of 8
percent
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,
this
increased to 13
percent
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in 2015. Interest and borrowing were 5 % in 2010,
this
rate doubled
up
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in the final
year
. Education, which comprised
to
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the largest segment was 24% in 2010.
This
slightly dropped down
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3% in 2015. In the first
year
, healthcare was the
second
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expenses
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with 21%.
This
gently experienced a drop
with
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1%. In 2010, Defence was 17% of the total payments, which showed a downward trend to 14% in the final
year
. Transport, Culture and Leisure made up 3% and 2% of the government expenditures and both declined to 1% in 2015.
In contrast
,
Pension
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and Others remained steady in both years at 19% and 1%.
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