In many countries people tend to move overseas or move to a different part of their country after their retirement. Discuss why it is so and the outcomes of this situation. Provide specific reasons and examples to support your opinion

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In today’s world, retired citizens are love to move away from home to live an affordable and healthy life. In many countries, citizens

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are wanting

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to go foreign

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or another section of their own

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afterward their retirement. In

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decisions

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. After retirement (end of job days), older people have enough time to think about their living so that they move to other cities or abroad to explore and travel different places which they could not able to do because of their tight working schedule.

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, they

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eager to secure their living by moving to low expensive place to live.

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, as we get older, better health care is needed with reasonable cost. They

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choose the city outskirts or

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side (countryside) to avoid

big cities hustle

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the big city's hustle

big city's hustle

big city hustle

(the big city hustle) and pollution.

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, Ecuador, Panama and Mexico etc.

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some countries with lower (lowest) cost of accommodation, beautiful and diverse landscape, perfect climate and good medical services. Admittedly, people who change of their place to (in

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or another city after retirement have access to fresh food, vegetables and less pollution.

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, they tend to live happily because of better weather and hospital support with low priced service. They

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change their location for the support they need like social support can prevent them from slipping into depression. Overall, elderly persons leave their home

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or go to

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country side

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the country side

for many causes.

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, their life after working for

others create

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others, create

a new chapter, which is

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changing

the way of their hectic life. So, I strongly agree that retirees should relocate their places in order to live a high quality and virtuous livelihood.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Fully explain your ideas

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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

some people think that schools should focus on academic subjects like algebra, history, and physics, but others think that schools should spent time focusing on practical skills like time management and banking. Discuss both views and give your opinion.