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During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants. Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter • remind him when and where you met • tell him what kind of job you are interested in • say what you think you would be suitable for the job

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Dear Sir, I am Arin
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 and was sitting
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 to you
in
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 the plane while flying between London and Newyork. During our talk
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 the journey, I was suggested to contact you regarding my placement in one of your restaurants. I have completed my Master in International
Crusine
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Cuisine
 and
specilized
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specialized
specialised
 in
Desserts
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 Department. I have 2 years experience. I am interested to work as
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lead
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 in the same stream. I am capable in preparation of all international
desserts
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 to the best presentation and taste. I
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 am certified in creating mixed
cruisine
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cuisine
cruising
desserts
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, meeting the satisfaction of the client. I have
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 received several appreciation certificates for my skills. I look forward
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this
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 job, as during our discussion you put forward the lack of perfection in the dessert section of your restaurant. I believe I will be able to fill in the gap and create your restaurant as a symbol for
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 in the city. I will
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 be able to provide you with the reference letter and a copy of all my certificates
rececived
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received
 from my previous employer, which I had to quit due to relocation. I will be able to represent my quality of work, given an
oppertunity
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opportunity
. Looking forward
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 your reply.
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 sincerely Arin
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • chain of restaurants
  • potential job opportunity
  • relevant experience
  • managerial role
  • customer service
  • qualifications
  • certifications
  • unique skills
  • eagerness
  • admiration
  • resume
  • references
  • face-to-face meeting
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