Some people think that government should not give international aid since people have disadvantages like unemployment and homeless in their own country. To what extent do u you agree or disagree?

International assistance is an invaluable way of help for poor countries.
However
, while some people agree with
this
, others believe that
authotorities
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the authorities
authorities
should not allocate resources to other regions as donor countries themselves possess problems like
joblessess
not having a job
jobless
and destitute people.
This
essay will explain why
this
view is partly justified,
although
argue that foreign
aid
is absolutely
neccessary
absolutely essential
necessary
for least developed countries.
To begin
with, any country of the world, no matter how rich it is, have issues
such
as unemployment and people without homes, which by no means should be overlooked by its
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
.
Threfore
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Therefore
Therefor
,
argument
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the argument
goes, that before assisting others,
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
should help its
indigenious
originating where it is found
indigenous
societies. It becomes
especcially
to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common
especially
specially
explicit if still developing country provides assistance to a
neghboring
nation, when having a high rate of
forementioned problems
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the aforementioned problems
aforementioned problems
.
Thus
, resentment of dwellers of
such
countries might be somewhat understood.
Conversely
, there are
unfortunately
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unfortunate
nations who live beyond extreme poverty and cannot provide
means
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a means
for living for people, and for which international assistance has become a salvation. To illustrate, in some countries in Africa
such
life threats as starvation and outbreaks of deadly diseases like Ebola are still present and there seem no way for them to emerge from poverty,
than accept
Suggestion
then accepts
then accept
humanitarian
aid
from overseas.
Therefore
, at least minimal support from donor countries which have the smallest rate of unemployment and
homelssness
the state or condition of having no home (especially the state of living in the streets)
homelessness
will be invaluable for them. To conclude, foreign
aid
is an immensely significant way of support for developing nations.
Although
donor countries have serious issues like joblessness and destitute people to solve,
this
aid
should be provided for
poorest
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poorer
countries at least in minimal amounts.
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