The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

From
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Since
the ancient ages to our days people want to move as fast as it possible. Horses, diligences, and
finally
cars became our forms of transportation.
Number
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A number
The number
of the
last
increased drastically throughout
last
100 years. On the one
hand these
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hand, these
vehicles increased people's life speed, but on the other they are
great source
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a great source
of pollution, accidents and noise. Some people think that should be encouraged alternative form of transportation introduced international laws to control car ownership and use. I totally agree with
this
statement. The
first
reason is that less control of ownership of cars leads to a great number vehicles on the street. They, in a turn make a lot of
noize
sound of any kind (especially unintelligible or dissonant sound)
noise
nice
noises
, a huge air pollution. As
example we
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example, we
can take a look at Chinese
town Shanghai
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town, Shanghai
, where because of millions of cars people can't breath without masks. Number of cars should be limited by maximum CO2
emmision
the act of emitting; causing to flow forth
emissions
emission
, acceptable for the region. The
second
reason is that high speed vehicles
is
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are
a source of traffic accidents. Many
lifes
a characteristic state or mode of living
lives
life
can be
safed
rescued; especially from the power and consequences of sin
saved
solved
by using,
for example
, bicycles,
instead
of cars. Despite the
wide spread
widely circulated or diffused
widespread
idea, that
such
kind of vehicles as
skateboard
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a skateboard
or bicycle can't be used as daily mean of transportation, in many European
cities
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city's
citizens mostly use them to get to work or home. The
third
reason is that the most part of the day people spend at work in sitting position.
Furthermore
, in a case of traffic jam, owner of a car can spend a few additional hours in his vehicle chair, what has a really bad
consequences
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consequence
in a future. People can avoid
this
situation by using of more healthy vehicles. In
conclusion i
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conclusion, I
conclusion I
want to underline importance of law control of car ownership and use, because less of it can lead to environmental problems.
Also
rise of the percentage of alternative form of transport lead to decreasing number of street accidents and increase
healthy
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health
of people.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • reliance on
  • regulate
  • traffic congestion
  • pollution
  • public health
  • sustainable development
  • alternative forms of transport
  • car ownership
  • balancing benefits and drawbacks
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