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Some people think that not only should professional sports and cultural enterprises be sponsored by the government but also that amateur adult and children groups should get funding. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your position.

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A growing number of people think that the government should not only fund professional sports and cultural society, but
also
 the societies where adults and children are learning sports. I completely agree with
this
 as it will help the children explore their talents and adults to improve their talent. There are a large number of talented individuals in India who are unable to reach the desired heights in the sport of cultural events due to lack of financial support. They lack a money to pay for the coaches and cannot afford the required equipment to practice the skill. If the right training with the proper coaches and pieces of equipment is provided to
such
 individuals than they can represent the country at various international games and make the country proud by winning the medals. So, the government should
also
 provide a necessary fund to the amateur and learning groups so that the talented adults can improve their skills and represent the nations at the national and international level. The other reason is that the children can
also
 explore various sports and decide which sport they are good at and can pursue
further
. The government funding
also
 encourages the parents to allow their child/children to pursue sports along with academics. These children could
also
 become the future of the nation and represent the country from a very young age at various international platforms. In conclusion, Government funding of amateur adults and children's societies help talented individuals lacking financial support to improve and grow their skills.

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