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The charts below show the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features

The charts below show the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features
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The bar chart compares the percentage change in exports in each category during 2015 and 2016. We can see from the chart that in 2015 an average of 60$
billion
 were
being
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earned by petroleum
product
,
while
 approximately 63$
billion
 were earned by the same
product
 in 2016. Exceeding by 8.5% in the export of engineered
good
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goods
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 from 2015 to 2016. The figure shows a
plummeted
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in earning
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earning
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earnings
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 in the export of germs and jewellery to approximately 40$
billion
. In 2015 the
country
 owned
by
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the agricultural
product
 about 30%
billion
 which
slightly
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 the same
in
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 2016. In 2015 the
country
 could earn by the textiles an average of 25$
billion
.
In contrast
,
however
 , by 2016, the percentage of textiles earnings had altered significantly by 15,24%.
Overall
, the chart indicates that the petroleum
product
 and engineered
good
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 make the
country
 earn more money,
while
 the
country
 did not earn much from textiles and agricultural
product
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products
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words billion, product, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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