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Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree? Provide relevant examples if necessary.

#salary #job #satisfaction
It Is often argued that
job
 offering higher salary is more advantageous than
job
satisfaction
. I completely disagree with
this
 opinion and think that
job
satisfaction
 plays a pivotal role as compared to remuneration.
First
 of all, a
person
 will go to an interesting and satisfying
work
 with good mood and desire to
work
. According to statistics, 70 percent of people want to have a congenial employment. Uninteresting
work
 leads to nervous breakdowns and irritability.
For example
, if someone admits that
money
 is the only reason for his life, he can end up spending a
third
 of his time on
work
 that he hates, and most of his life because focusing only on
money
 leads to obsession.
Thus
,
job
satisfaction
 is most essential as compared to higher salary as it gives people a sense of fulfilment which no
money
 can guarantee.
Secondly
, there is a direct relation between
job
satisfaction
 and productivity. As a rule, a
person
 can get a high salary for anything
that is
 done well, since challenging and demanding
work
 is always required. A congenial employment helps to achieve a
person
 of goals in life and increase income at his favourite
job
.
For instance
, many researchers are famous and popular not because of appealing wages, but because of their passion and interest. On balance, an interesting and satisfying
job
 gives motivation to human development and desire to earn. To conclude, I strongly believe that a
job
 should bring
satisfaction
, calmness and pleasure, and if a
person
 chooses
satisfaction
 over
money
,
money
 will come eventually.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
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