The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions)of telephone calls in the uk, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002 . Summarise the information

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions)of telephone calls in the uk, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002 . 

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In
this
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we can see that there are three
catagory
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category
of call type, first one is
local-fixed
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line
,
second
one
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national and international-fixed
line
,
third
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one
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is Mobiles(all calls) There is
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number of
minutes
(in
billion
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)of telephone calls in the UK,divided into three
categories
,
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from
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1995-2002. At
first
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we can see that the local fixed
line
is higher than
other
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two
categories
. In 1995 the
rate
of
local
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the local
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fixed
line
is in 70minutes(
billions
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the national and international-fixed
line
is in 35 to 38
minutes
(
billions
). And the
last
mobiles
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(all calls) is in 5
minutes
(
billions
) . The total
rate
of
minutes
(
billions
)of all
categories
was increased in
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7 years. We can see that the
rate
of
of
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local-fixed
line
was increasing till 1999 after 1999 it was decreasing. In category two the national and international-fixed
line
we can see that it is increasing
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1995 to 2002. The
rate
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and international-fixed
line
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is constantly increasing. On other
hand
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  the
rate
of mobile (all calls) has increased a lot
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past
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. The
rate
of mobiles(all calls) has
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number of
of
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minutes
(
billions
). It moves so fast than
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two
categories
.  From the
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whole
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graph
chart
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we can see that the total number of
minutes
(
billions
) was constantly increasing,
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except
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local
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the local
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-
fixed
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line
.
Local
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fixed
line
also
increases between 1995 to 1999 after that we can see that it was decreasing .

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