Some people think man made zoos should not longer exist in 21st century .do you agree or disagree?

Zoos play an important role in
ones
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one's
life. According to some, zoos should no longer exist in
present era
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the present era
,
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,
which keep the wild animals in
artificial environment
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an artificial environment
artificial environments
.
This
essay will intend to examine that why zoos are essential. I
,
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,
however
, discord with
this
statement. From my perspective, zoos boosts the economy
,
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,
provide entertainment and preserve the
species
of wild animals. It
is alleges
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is alleged
that zoos are the
second
habitat of wild animals after forests, but certain people think that they should not exist anymore as they believe that given today's ultra modern technology television is the biggest invention of
21st century
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the 21st century
, which act as an ocean of knowledge regarding animals be it farm animals or wild animals. In
this
context, they think that there is no need of zoos as people can get information about wild animals and can watch them on television as well. In New Zealand,
for example
,
count
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the count
a count
of zoos has been declined because of the discovery of television since it telecast a number of wild animal channels. That said,
although
these people have their own point, the importance of zoos should not put on a back burner. The
first
and foremost factor is entertainment. To elaborate my point of view, zoos act as a
strees
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stress
buster
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.
thesdays
the fifth day of the week; the fourth working day
Thursdays
Tuesdays
, people have a
hactic
marked by intense agitation or emotion
hectic
schedule so whenever they get free time they like to visit zoos.
Hence
, there are
number
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a number
of
species
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,
which entertain the people like monkeys and
bear
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bears
.
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.
In
this
way, when they visit over there
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,
they feel
relax
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relaxed
and rejuvenate their mind by seeing an ample number of
species
. A survey conducted by
wild life research centre
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a wild life research centre
wildlife research centre
the wild life research centre
which revealed that half of the populace prefer zoos for rejuvenation
.
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.
What is more, from the economic point of view, zoos lend their helping hand to make the nation financially sound. The majority of footfalls visit zoos, they pay the entry fees and parking fees as well. Due to which, it
collect
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collects
big chunk of money from tourists. The lion zoo
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,
which is located in Mumbai earn thousands of dollars from visitors and it
put
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puts
contribution for the development of its city.
Additionally
, zoos
also
provide the shelter
to
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for
wild animals, which are on the verge of extinction
.
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.
owing
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Owing
to
This
, it feeds them properly and give them a proper medical care when they are injured. Ultimately, it
conserve
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conserves
many
species
of animals. To conclude,
although
there are some contradictory arguments, I personally believe that zoos not only provide entertainment but
also
boosts the economy and preserve the
species
.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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