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It is inevitable that traditional cultures will be lost as technology develops. Technology and traditional cultures are incompatible. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

#cultures #technology
Technology
 has increased at a rapid pace in the past few years and it is going to do so in the time to come too.
This
 change has
also
 transformed our lifestyles too. With
this
 transformation, many people worry that our traditional cultures will suffer and die out for good. I personally feel that
this
 fear is false and has no grounds.
To begin
 with, traditional cultures comprise of two things; its values and its norms. The evolution of
technology
 affects only the norms of a culture and not its values. As an example, let’s take the tradition of writing letters to the loved ones that our ancestors did many a times. Writing a letter is the norm while caring for your loved ones is the value of
this
 tradition. With the emergence of
technology
, messaging apps like WhatsApp and Messenger have taken over the norm of letter writing because of their efficiency but the caring of your loved ones still exist. Same is the case with being
upto
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up to
 date with the current affairs by reading newspapers on your breakfast table in the morning. The people can still know all the news through the same newspaper on their smartphone anytime they want. The list goes on and on about how
technology
 has changed the norms of traditional culture but has not tinkered with its values. To conclude,
technology
 has only made better our traditional cultures by improving the norms related
with
Suggestion
to
 the values.
Thus
, it is perfectly compatible with the traditional cultures as it keeps their
essence
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essentially
 unchanged.

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