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Some people believe that part time job can be beneficial for better jobs in future. Others think it can easily distract students. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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A part-time
job
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 is the kind of
work
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 a person does for fewer hours per week, allowing an individual to explore different other aspects of his or her character. While in many
countries it
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countries, it
 is common for students to
work
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 part-time, allowing them the freedom to learn their course practically, allowing better knowledge about their subject. Some people think that a
job
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 during the
student
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 years takes away the time and attention required during education. Doing a part-time
job
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 while studying definitely ensures a more practical knowledge about a subject to the
student
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.
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, a
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 doing a course
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 mechanical engineering is more likely to know about what he or she is studying when they get to
work
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 on the real tools in real-life scenarios. Even more, part-time jobs allow students to become more independent. Most students are seen to save money from their part-time jobs for their graduation.
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, odd jobs are very tough to handle for students. They need to focus not only on their studies but
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at
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, leaving them drained off, with no social life. It has been even observed that some
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leaves
 their education to
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, while in many cases there have been positive results, in many the students were left with neither a good
job
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 nor a better education. Overall, part-time jobs offer more exposure to the students about their subjects; if chosen wrongly, it can leave the person drained off to pursue other plans. In my opinion, an individual should do a part-time
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, but it should always be something that he or she loves to do and enhances their personality.
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