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Around the world children learn English language as a second language at school. however, in some places they also learn at Kinder garden. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of learning at kinder garden?

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English has become a prominent
language
 from past few decades around the world. Schools are teaching English to children as a
second
language
 in most of the countries.
However
, there are few places, where they study at primary school.
This
 approach has both advantages and disadvantages, which I will discuss in following paragraphs, before coming to a conclusion Talking about advantages,
firstly
,
language
 can be learnt easily at kinder garden by children. Since they are new to learning, teachers can mould their mind towards learning
two
 languages simultaneously.
This
 way a child can inculcate
two
 languages without any
burdurn
an onerous or difficult concern
burden
 and can learn effectively in upcoming years.
Secondly
, from the beginning of school,
childfren
a young person of either sex
children
 can get exposure of
two
 cultures, which will make their perception wider. They will get to know how rituals and customs are performed, and what are the purpose of their performances. Ultimately, it will help them in their overall growth.
However
, there are disadvantages
also
 of learning at kinder garden. It can create confusion while learning to become bilingual. Children can get
puzzle
Suggestion
puzzled
 in
chosing
pick out, select, or choose from a number of alternatives
choosing
 which
language
 to apply and where to use.
As a result
, none of the languages are learnt properly,
effecting
arousing affect
affecting
 their communication skills.
In addition
, some children
can not
can not
cannot
 cope up with the studies. So, learning
two
 languages will put
extra burdurn
Suggestion
an extra burden
extra burden
extra burdens
 on them.
Therefore
, it is better for them to learn
another another
any of various alternatives; some other
another
language
 later. To conclude, I have discussed
merits
Suggestion
the merits
 and demerits of studying
english
an Indo-European language belonging to the West Germanic branch; the official language of Britain and the United States and most of the commonwealth countries
English
 at kinder
graden
a plot of ground where plants are cultivated
garden
.
Although
 merits are convincing, demerits can not be ignored. But, it can be overcome by
involvement
Suggestion
the involvement
 of both teachers and parents to discuss child's progress and work
accordingly
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