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“unemployment remains the biggest challenge to school-leavers in most countries” how far do you agree with this assessment? what other challenges face young people today?

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The issue of youth
unemployment
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recently receives
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has recently received
 much public attention, which cause a large impact on many countries worldwide. But we cannot say it’s the largest concern human beings faced, there
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exists many other
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exists in many other
 global challenges which are at least as serious. Admittedly, the subject of the joblessness appears to be one of the most challenging problems for school leavers. In many countries, the job market is competitive, as most enterprises pursue these school-leavers with graduation certificates of prestigious universities.
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 ensures that many school-leavers cannot get a satisfactory job and become
unemployment
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 population.
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 on, the youth
unemployment
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 may undermine graduates’ economic prospects and increase the government’s employment pressure.
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, there are many other global challenges people need to face. Foremost among these is perhaps the environmental problems, either in developed countries or developing countries. In former countries, pollution is an issue always discussed
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, involving the annual financial budget, benefit game between private companies and government and relevant international agreements. The budget for meliorating the environment in these countries is huge and sometimes become a financial burden to the local government. In the latter countries, the diseases like respiratory diseases caused by the over-exploitation and the booming manufacturing always harm the individuals’ health and impede the economic development. Generally,
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 the youth
unemployment
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 tends to be an expensive problem for school-leavers and local governments, the environmental challenges may endanger the global development in the
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