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Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. Discus both these views and give your own opinion.

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Some countries have single-sex education models, while in
others both
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others, both
 single sex and mixed schools co-exist and it is up to the parents or the children to decide which model is preferable. Some
educationalists
 think it is more effective to educate boys and girls in single-sex schools because they believe
this
 environment reduces distractions and encourages pupils to concentrate on their studies.
This
 is probably true to some extent. It
also
 allows more equality among pupils and gives more opportunity to all those at the
school
 to choose students more freely without gender prejudice.
For example
, a much higher proportion of girls study science to a high level when they attend girls’ schools than their counterparts in mixed schools do.
Similarly
, boys in single-sex schools are more likely to take cookery classes and study languages, which are often thought of as traditional subjects for girls.
On the other hand
, some experts would argue that mixed schools prepare their pupils better for their future lives. Girls and boys learn to live and work together
form
a giver or sender
from
 an early age and are
consequently
 not emotionally underdeveloped in their relations with the opposite sex. They are
also
 able to learn from each other, and
to experience
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experience
 different types of skill and talent
then
 might be
evident
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evidence
 in a single gender environment. Personally, I think that there are advantages to both systems. I went to a mixed
school
, but feel that I myself missed the opportunity to specialise in science because it was seen as the natural domain and career path for boys when I was a girl. So because of that, I would have preferred to go to a girls’
school
.
Accept space
.
But hopefully times have changed and both genders of student can have equal chances to study what they want to in whichever type of
school
 they attend.

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