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You have a Facebook friend living in another country and s/he is curious to learn about a major news item in your country.

#facebook #friend #country #news #item
Dear Ramesh How are you? Hope you are doing well. Everything is fine here and I am currently preparing for my entrance exams which will help me with my admissions for the post-graduation diploma. You know how hard I am preparing for it from the initial days of our holidays. I think you have heard about the URI attack in Jammu and Kashmir recently. It’s a great shock to the Indian military and the citizens. The soldiers were attacked in their sleep by the terrorists.
Such
 a cowardly move by the cruel minded cold-hearted animals.
Moreover
, uncle Mahesh lost is best friend to
this
 attack. He and his whole family has been out of station to attend the funeral and show condolences to his family.
Although
 he is acting normal uncle Mahesh has been very upset due to
this
 incident. Perhaps these incidents will strengthen him for his future. The whole family is worried about him. Hope the Indian government and Indian army would provide justice for the lost souls. May God give strength to the family of the lost soldiers.
Accordingly
, India as a nation will
also
 have to rise up to its normal condition. That’s all from here and what are you up to in America? It’s been long since we have met and I surely hope to meet you soon.
In addition
 to that, I wanted to inform you that my parents are visiting America
next
 month and they are hoping to see you
also
.
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