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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now ' one big traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?

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 2000, 2020 and the predicted time in 2050. Overall, it can be seen that international tourism experienced an upward trend, while meat products showed a decrease in their rate.
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