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The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The design and placement for a wave-energy
machine
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 are presented
on
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 the
illustratiion
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illustration
.
In the
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The
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 first illustration, it shows how the was-energy
machine
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 works. It starts when the wave is directed to enter the chambers, which results in the rise of
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water
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the water
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 level. When the
water
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 reaches the appropriate level, it would
then
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,
enter
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 the airflow on the upper
chamber
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 rising up and out above. After which the cycle will continue as airflow from the outside enters
in
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the upper
chamber
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 causing the turbine to spin and power the electricity generator. The airflow now
,
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 goes down to the lower
chamber
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 and
in
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 the
water
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.
On the other
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hand
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 the
second
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 illustration is about the location of the
machine
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. These machines
has
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 two possible placement. It can either be on a low installation cost, where only small waves
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 inside the
chamber
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 or a high installation cost, which is when
a
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large
waves
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 enters the
chamber
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, since it is located deeper in the
water
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 bed, and would result in the high output . Both
location
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locations
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 of the wave-energy
machine
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 differs in
the
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location and causing one to receive more and the other less.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words machine, water, chamber with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "goes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "goes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "wave" was used 3 times.
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