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Fewer and fewer people today write by hand using a pen, pencil or brush. What are the reasons? is this a positive or negative development?

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In the today's technological world, people use their smartphones, tablets, laptops and many other gadgets for communication and
also
 many other purposes. Rather,
previouse
the number
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number
 of people
usein
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use in
 a
pen
, pencil or brush in many different areas
such
 as communication, Important notes, to write something etc.
this
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This
 is a negative
sides
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side
for
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to
 the growth of
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
children's
.
Firstly
, In
this
 modern life, children
uses
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use
 these different
technology
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technologies
 to store information, Ideas and a lot more stuffs. Because, day by day these things
such
 as pencil or
pen
 bought by a very few people.
they
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They
 do not even remember these things from when they tie up with the modern
technology
.
Furthermore
,
childrens
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children's
children
 main growth
is depend
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depends
 upon these items.
when
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When
 they write something with
pen
 or using other tools manually, their mind is
become
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becoming
 sharpen because of they think
for
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of
about
 that.
their
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Their
 many other skills
us
plural of "I"
we
 develop with these things.
Also
, the research said that those who use
pen
 or pencil to write something is far better in communication and
also
 better in
cognitive area
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the cognitive area
cognitive areas
.
they
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They
 learn quickly as well as they prepare better than
compare
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compared
 to those children who uses
technology
instead
 of these tools.
Moreover
, the
technology
 is lock their brain systems and thinking process. To conclude, the impact of the
technology
 on children is more negative to compare with positive development. I am totally agree with
this
 statement.
technology
the practical application of science to commerce or industry
Technology
 is good for many other
reasons but
Accept comma addition
reasons, but
 not for the growth of children in
this
 scenario.

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