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Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

#organisations #employees #dress #value #quality #work #appearance
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The employees appearance importance over
quality
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 of
work
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 is debatable.
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, some believe in
employee
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 smart dressing sense others vote up for their
work
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’s
quality
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. The essay will discuss about both of these qualities and the priority of grooming over efficacy of
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work
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the work
. The employees dressing is the one that creates
first
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 impression
for
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of
 the customer or client about the
employee
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 so it is necessary to dress well. Good dressing knowledge will give good impression about the
employee
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 and Confidence for the client to converse and make
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 queries with the
employee
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. If a person
work
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 peculiarity is
good but
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good, but
 he/she does not have proper dressing they will not be able to showcase their
work
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 with self-confidence. Organisations cannot completely select a candidate based on their dressing so the solution is
,
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,
may be they can select the candidate based on their
quality
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 of
work
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 and knowledge after which they should offer proper dress code to make the
employee
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 look good and educated.
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 will help the institutes to have a perfect
employee
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. To conclude proper dressing shows the person’s good professional skill and the
quality
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 of
work
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 is indeed
sufficient thing
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a sufficient thing
 to have a successful
carrier
the particular occupation for which you are trained
career
 so both smart dressing and
quality
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 of
work
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 is necessary to have a healthy working environment.
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