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Some people say material possessions are very useful in bringing us happiness, but others argue that they are useless in terms of providing happiness. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Since the ancient times, human has been in pursuit of
happiness
. There have been many arguments about the true definition of
happiness
. Some people argue that it comes from
money
,
however
, others, including me, believe that it is something that cannot be bought. Nowadays, many people in our
society
 are materialists. It is undeniable that
money
 is very powerful. It
fulfills
put in effect
fulfils
human’s
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human
 desires, whether it is
money
, fame, power or social status. Achieving something we have always wished for definitely brings us
happiness
.
For example
, most of us are craving for social status. With
money
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the money
 you will easily get into high
society
, make friends and get respect from successful people.
In addition
, the quality of life of rich people is absolutely much better since they are able to afford
the finest
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the finer
 things.
Moreover
, there are some memorable experiences which we have to pay for to go through
such
 as travelling abroad or go camping with our family.
On the other hand
, others believe that giving is receiving. They trust in achieving
happiness
 by helping people and contributing to the
society
. They find themselves happy and blissful in devoting to build a better world by helping those who are disabled or too poor. Buddha said “If you light a lamp for someone else it will
also
 brighten your path”, serving
society
 helps us discover our inner beauty as well as makes us feel fulfilled and gratified. The sense of
fulfillment
a feeling of satisfaction at having achieved your desires
fulfilment
 shows that our life
have
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has
purpose
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a purpose
 and makes it rich, meaningful and happy. To sum up, there are convincing arguments that material possessions bring
happiness
.
Nevertheless
, I personally think the
truly
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true
 way of achieving
happiness is
Accept comma addition
happiness, is
 giving and helping.

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