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The government should allocate more funding to teaching science than the other subjects so that the country can develop. Do you agree or disagree?

#government #science #subjects #country
Science
 and technology is the key to the progress and development of any nation. Technology plays a fundamental role in
improvement
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the improvement
 of the quality of
life
 and real economic growth in any society. I strongly believe that countries should allocate more funding to
science
 if they want to be in the span of economically strong and developed countries and offer their citizen better
life
 standards.
First
 of all, having a quality of
life
 is everyone's dream. It consist of having a safe and high standard
life
, with better working conditions, advantageous salary and additional benefits, reaching out numerous educational options.
For example
, the USA is the one of the most powerful country in the world. And I think the main reason for
that is
 its scientific achievements
such
 as innovations and leading discoveries in medicine, computer and other
science
 subjects.
In addition
 to improving
life
 quality,
science
create
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creates
 opportunities for its citizens as well as foreigners who want to have an
investments
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investment
 in scientific inventions which change the world's balance.
Therefore
, these investors bring cash and power to countries' economic growth. To give an example,
couple
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a couple
 of years ago, some business men from
Middle East
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the Middle East
 made investments in Turkey which resulted economical and political advantages for both of the countries.
However
, it does not mean the other subjects are not valuable. We should
also
 nurture our knowledge as well as our souls.We certainly need art, music or paint as well as history, linguistics, politics and geography
to have
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have
 knowledge and understanding of other countries. In conclusion, I agree that the government should give more importance and funding
to
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for
of
science
 to create a desirable and powerful country for
people
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the people
.
Accept space
.

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