The graph shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graph shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between

1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make

comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
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The demographics
shows
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show
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the different
population
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ratings between countries like USA, Sweden and Japan. It has been noticed that the growth of
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population
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the population
a population
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of age 65 and over has been very evident from
year
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the year
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1940 up to 2040. United State of
America
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America's
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population
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65
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of 65
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and over
year
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the year
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1940 is only 9% and slowly rise by 5%
1960
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in 1960
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.
During
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From
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the 1980’s
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1980’s
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1980s
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to 2020 declined by 2%,
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however
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rise up again by almost 8%
percent
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per cent
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.
Sweden
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Sweden's
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population
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for
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of
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65 and over increased from 3-4% every 2 decades. For Japan, the
population
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got
decrease
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decreased
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by 2% from 1940 up to 2000 and rose again from 2000 to 2040.
Therefore
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, the graph shows that Sweden has
increasing
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an increasing
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figure
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from the very beginning,
the
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and the
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survival rate of the elder is high and might affect
future
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the future
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economic stability,
so
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apply
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as USA and Japan. From the graph, the government will provide a developmental program that can support the economy and workforce.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • aging population
  • proportion
  • elderly
  • significant increase
  • surpass
  • gradual increase
  • crucial period
  • rapid increase
  • healthcare advancements
  • lower birth rates
  • projections
  • adjustments in social services
  • demographic dynamics
  • lifestyle choices
  • trends
  • notable
  • potentially
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