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The chart below gives information on the percentage of british people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010.

The chart below gives information on the percentage of british people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010.
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The bar chart illustrates money received by a
charity
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 in the years 1990 and 2010 as a percentage of British people by
age
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 group.
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, it has been observed that the
age
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 bracket 18-25 donates the least amount of money
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charity
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 for both the years 1990 and 2010.
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, when discerned for the highest payers, analysed that the
age
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 group 36-50 contributes the most to
charity
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 in the year 1990
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 51-65 in 2010. In 1990 it has been identified that the three
age
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 groups 18-25, 26-35 and 36-50 are willing to sponsor
charity
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 more as compared to the individuals falling under the same ranges in 2010.
This
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 marginal difference between the two years has decreased from 10% in (
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the 18
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-25
age
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 range) to 6.5% in
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the 36
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-50
age
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 range.
Although
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,
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 many people were willing to donate in the year 1990, a sharp decline is observed in the
age
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 groups 51 and above. It is shown that there has been a rise of 3-5%
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 individuals paying capacity in the year 2010, for the previously mentioned
age
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 groups.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words charity, age with synonyms.
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