Some People believe that it is the responsibility of the individuals to take care of their own health.Others believe that government should make sure that their citizen are healthy. discuss both views

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Health
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is
one
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of the most important topics of discussion not only for
individuals but
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individuals, but
also
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for the world as a whole. On the
one
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hand, it is a belief of a few, that individuals should be
hold
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held
responsible for their
health
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while
on the contrary
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other believes that
government
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is responsible for maintaining the
health
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of its population.
This
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essay will discuss on how an individual along with the
government
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plays an important role in maintaining a healthy body. Most importantly, it is the
responsible
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responsibility
of every single human being to maintain their
health
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in order to avoid diseases and to live a healthy life. To have a healthy life,
one
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should strive towards having healthy eating habits along with regular exercises as has been recommended by multiple
health
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organizations. In
this
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high pace world,
one
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needs a constant motivation to avoid unhealthy foods and to extract time for physical exercises and
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can be solely provided to them by themselves. Even though a constant motivation is responsible towards maintaining a healthy body by individuals,
government
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also
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plays an equally important part in maintaining the
health
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of its population and
in particular
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of those who cannot afford some common amenities.
For example
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, a recent initiative by
Delhi State
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the Delhi State Government
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to have basic exercising equipment in all public parks help people to do regular exercise. Along with providing equipments to exercise,
government
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is regularly creating awareness, particularly in slum areas, to maintain hygiene in and around their places. To add
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, a number of free check up
center
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centres
centre
has been opened
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have been opened
in
low income population area
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the low income population, area
the low income population area
a low income population area
so that medicine
are
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is
at
minimum distance
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a minimum distance
from them and at free of cost. To conclude, a combination of individuals motivation and positive outlook towards
healthy body
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a healthy body
along with
Government
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’s initiatives and awareness towards
health
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system can help a country to have a healthy ecosystem.
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, not only an
individual but
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individual, but
also
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a
government
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is responsible to have a good
health
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.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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