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These days many families move abroad for work. Some people believe that this benefits the children in these families. Others believe that it makes their lives more difficult. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Relocating to abroad with family to work may benefit the children or may make their life more difficult.
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, relocating and moving in with family is very crucial and relaxing because everyone is at the same place not having to miss anyone since they are already there with you
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it eliminates distraction
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provides focus on the work and relieving anxiety from worrying about a loved one far away.
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this
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 benefits the children in the sense that
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they have their parents close to them to care and love them thereby saving them the emotional stress of missing anyone.
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 will improve these children's development and growth.
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it will improve mental stability
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considering what is happening in the world today, where guidance
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treat badly
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 children being left in their care. While
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it can be difficult for other children relocating with their family due to some social
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reasons, for
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some children
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the new environment
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 and to adapt in places of adverse climate change since they are new to that region. In conclusion
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it is of a great importance that children are taken along with their families.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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