The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport.

 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts compare how many trips are made by kids travelling to and from school in five different
transports
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means of transport
modes of transport
types of transport
kinds of transport
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: namely,
car
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passenger
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, walking, cycling, walking and
bus
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,
bus
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, in a country between 1999 and 2010. Figures are given in millions per year.
Overall
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, it can be seen that walking and
car
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passenger
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was the highest trip in 1999 and in 2010 respectively
while
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the number of other types
were
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was
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nearly both in 1999 and 2010.
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with
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in 1990, the number of walking, the highest
transport
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, was just over 12
million
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more than
car
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passenger
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passengers
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by three times
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the figure for cycling, walking and
bus
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,
bus
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were approximately six
million
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. In 2010, over 13
million
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of
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car
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passenger
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passengers
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which was the highest
transport
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was
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more than walking which was the
second
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transport
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at 6
million
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.
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, 2
million
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of
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cycling was the lowest
transport
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and lower than walking and
bus
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and
bus
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at three and five respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words car, passenger, bus, transport, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trips
  • children
  • modes of transport
  • walk
  • cycle
  • public transport
  • drive
  • car
  • trends
  • decrease
  • increase
  • shift
  • convenient
  • comfortable
  • commuting
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • significant
  • indicate
  • reasons
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • 20-year period
  • doubled
  • considerable margin
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