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Only government action can solve housing shortages in big cities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#government #action #shortages #cities
Metropolitan cities suffer a deficiency of residential places for
general public
Suggestion
the general public
, either it is the sole
responsibilty
the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force
responsibility
 of
government
 to deal with the
shortge
the property of being an amount by which something is less than expected or required
shortage
shortages
 or not is a debatable topic these days. It should mainly depend upon income of people to decide whether the housing is provided or not. Major cities have many problems
,
Accept space
,
housing being one of them. The main issues are lack of places for residential buildings and ever increasing commercial areas.
This
 has resulted in people not having homes so they have to hire places and areas close to their civic centre are very expensive so they have to rent places at distant places
.
Accept space
.
Furthermore
,
Accept space
,
 it will lead to the added cost of living.
This
 problem can be solved at
government
 level through adequate legislation, that a certain part of the city should be reserved for housing purposes
.
Accept space
.
In addition
,
Accept space
,
huge fine can be imposed on any encroachments towards residential areas. General public is paying taxes to the authorities so it is their responsibility to look after the people.
For instance
, low income or jobless people who are unable to build their homes should be facilitated
,
Accept space
,
otherwise
 these people will spend their lives on
road
Suggestion
the road
roads
 and be prone to immoral activities and drugs
.
Accept space
.
 It is argued by some people that if the
government
 starts building houses for people they will have to cut budget of other more important departments like health and education
.
Accept space
.
As a result
, these two most important factors which form the main pillars of society will be brought down.In my opinion
,
Accept space
,
 it can easily by managed if the budget is planned adequately. In conclusion, the decisions made by
government
 can solve problems of living of people
,
Accept space
,
so that people spend a comfortable life
.
Accept space
.
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