SUCCESS IS OFTEN MEASURED IN TERMS OF HOW MUCH MONEY SOMEBODY HAS EARNED. DO YOU THINK WEALTH IS GOOD MEASURE OF SUCCESS? HOW ELSE COULD WE MEASURE WHETHER SOMEBODY IS SUCCESSFUL OR NOT?

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Success

Suggestion

Successful

people are always shown as wealthy, have

modren

belonging to the modern era; since the Middle Ages

modern

lifestyle.

This

image has made the majority believe that the

measurment

the act or process of assigning numbers to phenomena according to a rule

measurement

success

is how big is the person's bank account or how many houses does he/she have.

while

Suggestion

While

others do not

agree these words

Suggestion

agree with these words

and think there are other ways to measure

success

. On the one hand, many people link the goals

achievement

Suggestion

achievable

achieved

with the

money

earnings and

that

Suggestion

that's

what

media

Suggestion

the media

shows us.

For example

, many movies and

documentaries talk

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documentaries, talk

about Bill Gates's

life

and how much

money

he has been earning, all of that because of his

invintion

the creation of something in the mind

invention

inventions

of computer operating

system "

Accept comma addition

system, "

Microsoft" and

definatly

without question and beyond doubt

definitely

that was a huge revolution, changes all our lives.

On the other hand

, there are other ways to see other's

success

Accept comma addition

success, such

such

as the value that added to the science or research methods.

For instance

, Albert

Einstien

physicist born in Germany who formulated the special theory of relativity and the general theory of relativity; Einstein also proposed that light consists of discrete quantized bundles of energy (later called photons) (1879-1955)

Einstein

has many inventions in our daily

life

and many scientific

thiores

a well-substantiated explanation of some aspect of the natural world; an organized system of accepted knowledge that applies in a variety of circumstances to explain a specific set of phenomena

theories

tires

tears

that still used by researchers until now but, he was not that wealthy person and he did not make much

money

from his valuable inventions. To conclude,

Money

is a

notisable

capable or worthy of being perceived

noticeable

change in

success

people

life

but, that does not mean having no

money

failure

Suggestion

a failure

life

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