Smoking not only harms the smoker but also those are nearby. Therefore it should be banned in public places. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Smoking is one of the prevalent routine worldwide, especially among the young generation.
However
, it
is not only harm
Suggestion
is not only harming
the
concerned person but
Accept comma addition
person concerned, but
person concerned but
also
the surrounding
peopld
the human beings of a particular nation or community or ethnic group
peoples
people
,
therefore
it should be banned
publically
in a manner accessible to or observable by the public; openly
publicly
. I am entirely in accordance with
this
statement as there is
nothibg
a quantity of no importance
nothing
deteriment
a damage or loss
detriment
than smoking in public. The individuals who do continual smoking show very health because the smoke that they consume leaves significant adverse
impactz
the striking of one body against another
impacts
impact
on the lungs. Lungs are the essential respiratory organs and smoke alters its functioning which
cause
Suggestion
causes
breathing problems.
Furthermore
, not only the
smokers but
Accept comma addition
smokers, but
also
the non-smokers who consume fumes of smoke certain respiratory complications.
Therefore
,
this
habit is dangerous in
al
quantifier; used with either mass or count nouns to indicate the whole number or amount of or every one of a class
all
the senses and for everyone. On
this
account, the people who cannot quit smoking try not to do
at
Suggestion
in
public places as it save the life of persons who are not into
thid
denotes a person or thing
this
deterimental
(sometimes followed by 'to') causing harm or injury
detrimental
practicd
Suggestion
practice
practices
. Government an public entities should
also
understand the situation and must provide smokers the private zone for smoking.
For instance
,
marketd
the world of commercial activity where goods and services are bought and sold
marketed
, shopping malls and all workplaces must have a side-place made only for smoking.
This
will definitely
reduces
Suggestion
reduce
the health problems occur in non-smokers. To conclude, smokers should
realizs
be fully aware or cognizant of
realize
realise
their responsibility and should do smoking at
provided
Suggestion
providing
areas
instead
of doing it
publically
in a manner accessible to or observable by the public; openly
publicly
biblically
.

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