The number of older people is increasing. Some people think it will cause problem to their countries; others believe that this group is important to the society. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

As the time passes by, people who used to be young and energetic, are becoming old and weak, which
also
increasing the numbers of older people. Some believe that these people are just a burden on the
society
while the other believes that
such
old- age people can play a vital role in reshaping the
society
, morally and culturally. In
this
essay I will address both of the points and will give my perception of it. Some people claim that the increasing quantity of older people will make a country over crowded and doesn't help to build the economy as well, because they got retired from their respective jobs and now just earning pensions from the Government, which could have been spent in building the economy and other requirements of young generation more efficiently.
Furthermore
, they
also
believe that
such
people will not let the
society
and the mindset of young generations
to grow
Suggestion
grow
, as they got stuck with their old beliefs and cultures. They don't let their children or grandchildren to think of their own and decide their future by themselves according to their experience, which may not help in
this
era
additionally
, they are lacking behind in the use of various technologies and don't prefer to accept the change, which technologies bring.
However
, masses
also
believe
in contrast
of all other people that, these people may reshape the
society
, which has gone into wrong path, as many children use to live with their
grand parents
a parent of your father or mother
grandparents
and their lifestyles greatly impact the way of living for kids in their future
subsequently
, they may get
plethora
Suggestion
a plethora
of useful skills from their grand parent's experiences and can learn from their mistakes in life. Grand parents may
also
keep a greater check on their
grand children
a child of your son or daughter
grandchildren
when their parents are busy in their offices. To conclude, I believe that having old people in
this
society
is a blessing for young generations like us
,
Accept space
,
because we can share our problems and can get advice from their experiences, regarding the life of today's world.

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