Nowadays we see an increase in social problems involving teenagers. Many people believe that it is because parents spend more time at work and less with their children. Do you agree or disagree?

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In the age of globalization and modernization, couples, in most parts of the world, opt for jobs to meet their financial needs.
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it brings handsome income for the family, critics believe that spending more
time
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at work place in comparison to their children is resulting in an increase in social problems in youngsters.
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statement is agreed and it will be shown through examples that children raised in nuclear families are more empathetic and perform well academically.
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, those children who get proper attention from their parents are found to be more empathetic and caring. To illustrate, my grandfather, who was an accountant, despite being in a hectic job, would contribute in daily chores with my grandmother, whenever he arrived home.
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not only gave a satisfaction to my
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grandmother, but
grandmother but
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imparted the values of contribution and
emphathy
understanding and entering into another's feelings
empathy
to their children.
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, statistics from Social Science Institute of United Kingdom have shown that children getting due care in their childhood from parents are likely to be more sympathetic and caring in
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the future
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, it clearly shows the strong relationship between parents’
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with children and their personality development.
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, Children who get ample attention from their parents are likely to perform well in their academic
carriers
the particular occupation for which you are trained
careers
.
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, since the
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four years, I have been in teaching students. I have observed that students who live with single parents owing to
work place
a place where work is done
workplace
requirements do not perform very well in their class exams in comparison to those living with parents in their area of residency. So, what is the main factor behind that?. I
beleive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
it is appropriate attention from their parents. From
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it can be logically deducted that due
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from parents is essential for academic success of an individual. To conclude, it can be said that children who do not get enough
time
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from their parents due to their work requirements have the
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social issues as teenagers. It
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is, therefore
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, hoped that in future government promulgates a relax policy for a good work-life balance for couples.
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